The mental image of the scene is effortlessly visualized with your words. Great approach with going with the dialogue to tell the story while pulling at the heartstrings. No words were wasted. Two thumbs up!
I really like your style. I had no trouble understanding who was saying what to whom. Maybe I’m a little off kilter. I enjoyed your story and wish I knew where Michael and Mia ended up.
Great story. With another 500 words, you could have supplied the extras they noted in the criticism. Most importantly, with everything you write, you become better.
Ain’t that the truth. Lol. I think my revision added something like 75 or 80 words, and it made a difference. I enjoy the distillation process of these micro-fictions... once they’re over.
The mental image of the scene is effortlessly visualized with your words. Great approach with going with the dialogue to tell the story while pulling at the heartstrings. No words were wasted. Two thumbs up!
Really good read Aaron!
Thanks, brother.
I really like your style. I had no trouble understanding who was saying what to whom. Maybe I’m a little off kilter. I enjoyed your story and wish I knew where Michael and Mia ended up.
Thanks Gail. I wonder where you think they ended up?
I’d have to get to know them a little better. You’re the writer, but you sound like a teacher😊
Great story. With another 500 words, you could have supplied the extras they noted in the criticism. Most importantly, with everything you write, you become better.
Ain’t that the truth. Lol. I think my revision added something like 75 or 80 words, and it made a difference. I enjoy the distillation process of these micro-fictions... once they’re over.